A Raise to Dread
Randall got a raise today. He would like to be happy about it but isn’t.
Randall and his ex-wife have been fighting for weeks over her alimony payments. She wants more money, it’s always about more money. He tries to get across to her that he doesn’t have it to give her.
They were both smitten with each other when they were in seniors in high school. She was the first girl he had ever dated. Randall was aware that many of the other boys in his class wanted to date her but she was dating him, exclusively, and he was proud. So very proud.
His mother warned him time after time, “Watch out for those pretty ones, son. They’ll get you in the end.”
Randall didn’t believe her for a minute. Not Elaina, she was beautiful and sweet and everything he wanted in a girl. Six months after their high school graduation, they were married.
That was five years ago, and now they are divorced. Maybe it was because Randall couldn’t make enough money to keep her happy. Or maybe she just stopped loving him. Didn’t really matter to him anymore. You don’t count chickens that don’t hatch.
Whenever he even thinks about her his head starts pounding, like a hammer that’s timed with the second hand of the clock.
Finally, with trembling hands, he picks up the phone and dials her number to give her the news she craves and he dreads.
Ryan Lance’s Writing Prompt:
Write a scene about an increase in pay that someone is not looking forward to.
43 thoughts on “Ryan Lance Writing Prompt 03-09-2015”
What news?? I want to know more! Lol Good story and a lot of background to the characters it makes it seem all too real. Great job PJ! 😃
Thanks Lrod! I kept rewriting this and rewriting this. Thinking it wasn’t good enough to submit. Then I thought, well, what the heck. I’ll submit it and learn from it. 😀 lol
He got a raise and it was all going to her.
That’s not the best news 😞
No, but that’s the best story I could think of to go along with the prompt. 😀 lol
Lol well it was still good 🙂
Thank you 🙂
Oh, and thank you very much!!
A great story, it definitely makes me want to read on!!! 😊
Thank you so much for reading and the positive comment. 🙂 🙂
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That breaks my heart.
Yes, it is heartbreaking!
This one is wonderfully written PJ! Perhaps you can make a whole story about it one day because I agree with the rest of the people here; It is screaming of more! more!
Thank you! I never really feel good about anything I publish, but I feel I am doing my best and that is all I can do at the time, sooner or later I will improve. I appreciate you reading and your positive and encouraging comments. 🙂
True artist never feel satisfied with their obra maestra but I guess it’s good. When we feel that there is always a room for improvement, then we give ourselves a chance to grow and learn.
I agree with you. And I have a lot of learning to do. 🙂
We all are. That’s why contact is essential though it is not always pleasant.
Such a sad truth.
Yes, sadly it is so. It was with my brothers anyway.
Sorry? About what?
I can understand why he is not jumping with glee.
Once again, a great story!
It engaged me from start to finish, and I hope you write more about this.
Thank you Francesca!
Sadly, it is all too common. Well written, Joy
It was for both of my brothers. Sad!
it is sad 🙂
Happy endings are always happy to read.. nice one! 🙂
(am assuming he calls her to give the happy news of getting back together! 😉 )
He’s on the phone with her when he and their son show up to her home. He is who she is on the phone with.
🙂 he he.. nice..
This story can be continued in some other prompt as a extension part 2. Has a lot of scope..
Thank you. Those continuation stories are hard for me. I read so many different stories that I can’t keep up with the stories from week to week. I don’t know if anyone else has this problem, but I do.
oh. i understand.. However, on contrary, it is also nice to leave a few bits to reader’s imagination as well.
I enjoyed reading this! 🙂
Thank you Prakash!
🙂 my pleasure.. 🙂
Very nicely written, well done! 🙂 Will you be carrying this forward?
Thank you so much for reading and commenting. No, I won’t be adding more to this story. Thank you for your interest though. I have only been writing flash fiction lately.
It’s just that this piece seemed to end in a sort of untold mystery, something that was waiting to be revealed… so I thought you might want to continue it. Like everyone else here, I would love it if you did. 🙂
Thank you, I really appreciate your interest! I guess it has an ending you have to imagine. Let it be whatever you want.
🙂 I can do that…
Are you interested in participating in flash fiction challenges?
Well, I’ve never done any, and neither have I really thought about it. But I suppose it’d be interesting…
But there’s always my low self-esteem to think about… I don’t know if I could ever pen down something worthy enough of being tagged as flash fiction 😦
You’d be surprised at well you will do. Here is the url and if you want to take a chance and try it, it is the challenge I host, I’ll be right there.
If you like it, there are three more challenges I will give you the url to.