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Inticing me to Swim Long and Deep
Until I'm like a Prune
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Deep startling clean blue water
Inticing me to Swim Long and Deep
Until I'm like a Prune
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BEAUTIFUL WORDS 
very nice! I can tell I’m going to need some practice!
Are you laughing at my Haiku? LOL
Absolutely not! I am in awe! I am going to need a little time to put together my post. This is going to be harder than I thought! But I love a challenge…
Betty, this is an assignment for the Poetry class I am taking. Haha! This isn’t the Weekly Challenge from the Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers. In fact, on Wednesday you will get a photo prompt from that website – Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers (not from Beautiful Words). It will have all the rules for the challenge in it. I started a class on Sunday (actually Monday for the ones teaching the class). The Haiku is an assignment for that class.
Well, I hope you score high, because imho, anyway, you wrote quite well! ☺
What is imho? (I’m not familiar with texting terms).
In my humble opinion! (or not so humble in my case!) 😃
Thanks! I tried to figure it out but couldn’t.
That’s okay. I had to ask someone, too, awhile ago.
Were you laughing at my Haiku? haha
I like the swimming metaphor and ending up like a prune!
Nice haiku! I haven’t done one in years so it wouldn’t be as good as yours 🙂
Lrod, this is the first one I have ever done. Haha! I’m sure it has a lot of room for improvemen!
Nice haiku 🙂
Thank you. 🙂
Thank you.
Now, I want to head to the beach to turn into a prune at 10:00pm. Thank you! Certainly captured my sense of sight.
I hope it was a pleasant one! 😀
Certainly 🙂
Oh, I wanted to put a little fun element in it so I threw in the prune image.
YES! This is perfectly enticing !!!!! 🙂
I needed to put a little fun element in it. Haha! One person didn’t like my “prune” image. 😀
Ah well! It gives a perfect image to me. Enjoying the water so much that you stay in until the skin is wrinkly from the fun. 😉
I use to swim that long too.
I wouldn’t mind that now. Though it would be tough diving in to any waters around here. The ice might give one a bit of a headache. 😉
Here too! I would have to go to the indoor heated pool.
sounds like an inviting swim for sure!
Thanks!
This is excellent. It’s refreshing to find a bit of humour in an art form that is taken so seriously. The unexpected nature of the last line made me laugh out loud.
Oh good! That’s exactly what I wanted. 😀
It’s my way of saying, don’t take yourself so damn seriously! Hahaha
I love it, PJ. 😊
Thank you Michelle! That was my first Haiku ever. LOL
🙂
It is refreshing. I can imagine the pellucid surface of water!
Thank you! I was trying to add a little “fun” in with it. This is the first Haiku I have ever done. LOL
The “deep” and “startling” had me feeling the water for sure!
Thank you. I appreciate your feedback. 🙂
I love your poem and especially the ending like a prune.
Thank you so much. That was my attempt to add a little humor into it.
you’re a lovely little prune!
Haha! Very funny. 😐 lol!! I wanted to make the Haiku funny. Haha!!
haha glad you like it… I hate prunes;-)
I like prunes but I can’t eat them because of you know… haha!
no…totally lost me as to why you cannot eat prunes. Have I missed something in my 52 years of existence….why Joy cannot eat those horrid shrivelled prunes?
They make your bowels move, thats why. Haha!!
Great Haiku. And I can totally relate to the ending up like a prune! I used to swim until my mom forced me to get out of the water 🙂 I don’t know how you keep up with all these Challenges and Classes. I can barely keep up with one – two posts a day. I can only do that because I schedule my post over the weekend.
I have set up my post for this Wednesday for Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers and I am sooo excited! I hope you are going to participate! I just sent out a test post to make sure it was working okay before I send out the real deal on Tuesday evening.
I’m planning on participating! looking forward to what you are doing 🙂
Have you joined the blog? I don’t remember seeing your post. The blog is ONLY for the challenge and nothing else.
Do I join it from your test post?
You should be able to go to the bottom of that page and there is a button for you to join it.
Ok I will look for your test post and join 🙂
Are you talking about the inlinkz button?
No, the follow button. This theme is different than others I have used and everyone said the follow button is on the bottom.
On the Haiku I wanted to add a little fun to it and why I put the prune in it. As a child, I too would swim until I ended up looking like a prune. I was a fish!
I always enjoy fun in poetry 🙂 I really like to write Haikus. That’s what I’ve set aside Tuesdays at 2 pm for “Haiku @ 2” on my blog 🙂 Although, sometimes what I write is a Senryu, but it still rhymes with 2 so it works! lol
I have never written Haiku before or the other one you mentioned. I am not a Poet so it will be interesting to see how I do in this class.
You are going to do an amazing job!! Poetry is a wonderful outlet for expression. I have a list of poetry forms on my site. I love trying new forms. I hope you enjoy your class.
Thank you Kirsten! I hope I do well, or at least okay. 🙂
Lol! I see what you mean now by a modern haiku. I think it’s a great attempt though. Makes me want to jump in the water too 🙂
I honest thought he said five words, seven words, five words. LOL
Hi Joy, this is very funny! I love it!
Thank you. I wanted it to be funny. And, I did it wrong. I thought it was words not syllables. Ben said it was ok, it was called modern Haiku. LOL!
I really like the imagery. Your first and second lines are each 1 syllable to long for a haiku though (illustrating my issue with the english language and haiku format.) Standard format is line one: 5 syllables, line 2: 7 syllables, line 3: 5 syllables. This is very difficult to achieve and still have nice imagery. 😦 And your haiku would lose out if you had to change it.
Thank you for the comment. Yes, I found out I had done it wrong. I thought they said 5 words, 7 words, 5 words, but “words” should have been syllables. Ben said it was considered, “modern Haiku” but maybe he was just trying to make me feel better. LOL
The haiku format does come from a language with distinct syllables! 🙂 Haikus are far more difficult to write in english because our syllables are very different. Japanese syllables a short; rarely more than two vowels in length, and with the exception of n they contain only one consonant. English is the opposite. It makes it difficult to replicate the structure in English so I can see why they have re-defined haiku for the language/
I am totally clueless when it comes to Haiku (or any poetry). I am on a huge learning curve! haha
Poetry is tricky even when you’re dealing with the language the format originated from. I think theres a knack to poetry that completely misses me…
I think it misses me too but I want to try it for the experience.
Are you going to join my flash fiction challenge? I know you are an accomplished writer and my challenge is for aspiring writers but we still need mentors and those who can help us improve. Interested?
I’ll join if I feel the inspiration bite. I’m not sure I’d call myself accomplished though. 🙂
Of course you are!
*hands in the air* Okay!! Put down the gun!! 😀
Sorry, didn’t mean to sound so strong.
Eh, I was laughing. Just still trying to get my head around the idea of being described certain ways. Used to Nice and Thoughtful (geh) but usually that’s as far as people get.
You’re being funny! You are more than that.
I’m asking because I am getting ready (in 5 minutes) to send out the first challenge.