Dropping her line into Fool’s Lake, Adela patiently waited for something to bite, but the bait she was using wasn’t interesting the fish. Her patience was getting thin and she was feeling very close to giving up when she remembered what Hank told her,
“They will bite, just be patient. Remember, they will test you first.” .
“If I could just get a nibble, all I need is a nibble.” She thought to herself.
It was getting late in the evening and her frustration was mounting.
“Hank’s going to kill me. He wanted to reel in at least one John tonight.”
Just then the bartender winked at her and sat her drink down in front of her,
“Want to meet me in my room after I get off of work for a fifty?”
Adela winked back and set her hook. (130 words)
“Monday’s Finish the Story” Challenge is graciously hosted by Barbara Beachem. She provides us with the first sentence and a photograph for us to base our stories on. If you are interested in joining this challenge, click this link:
BEAUTIFUL WORDS 
I want to say ‘cute’ but that is just not the right word. Way to twist the ‘hook’
Thank you Kate! It’s okay to say cute. (LOL!!)
Ha! We do have similar themes just a much different audience for the bait!! Great spin on the prompt.
Thank you! I really liked your spin too! Very imaginative.
Haha–nice take!
Thank you!
Nicely done Joy, there’s more than one way to use your bait.
Thanks Tommy! I didn’t get the purpose of the “bait” across right. She is suppose to be a policewoman undercover. Fool’s Lake is the bar where all the “fools” are. LOL!!
Oh I see, yes one must be careful.
Way to bait the hook! This is a great twist on the prompt. The twist caught me by surprise 🙂
LOL! That is what i wanted it to do but I’m afraid it didn’t come off the way I wanted it to. She isn’t a prostitute. She’s a policewoman undercover and Hank is her boss (not a pimp).Haha!
I wondered about that, but wasn’t sure 🙂 it is a great take on the prompt.
Thank you! I appreciate your opinion.
Reblogged this on Latest Stories by Shivangi.
Thank you for the reblog!!
Excellent Joy! I liked the way you wove this story! Thank you for participating and see you next week? I hope so! Be well… ^..^
Absolutely! Thank you for inviting me back again. 🙂
🙂
Wow! Great little way to use that bait. Very creative and luring Priceless! 🙂
Thanks Colleen! She wasn’t suppose to come across as a prostitute (except to the bartender). She is a policewoman undercover but I couldn’t get that across well enough with 150 words or less.
Ha! No, I didn’t get that part. But, that just means she is doing a great job as an undercover policewoman!!! 🙂
LOL! That’s right! I hadn’t thought about that. 😀
I had to re read it twice after reading the comments since most people seemed to think she was a prostitute and I was one of those people too lol but it was a pretty awesome twist. The photo tricked me into thinking she was actually fishing next to the lake, great job! 😀
Yes, that photo was our prompt photo. We can write what we want just as long as it makes some sort of reference to the photo. You were right, she was a prostitute (but really a police woman undercover). Unfortunately I had only 100-150 words and didn’t get that across well enough.
You did pretty well though 🙂
Thank you! They are fun. You should join in with us.
If you are interested in reading the other’s submissions, click on the link that I put on my post and it will take you into the host’s post. In her post is a blue box with a frog on it. You click on the blue box and it takes you into inLinkz and you can read the other submissions. Some of the people are actually authors of books and they write some awesome flash fiction!
I’ll stop by and read others submissions to see everyone’s different point of views, thanks! 🙂
Well written and a clever twist! I’ll look forward to reading more!
Thanks Kim! These flash fiction challenges are fun! If you enjoy writing you should join in with us!
This was really an unexpected ending, I was thinking about fish, not about….
LOL!! That was my sneaky move. Haha!
very sneaky 🙂
Haha! Just having fun.
Nice twist! 🙂 You caught me!
Thanks! Flash fiction is a lot of fun.
Wow.. first I didn’t get it.. on re-reading the story became clear. nice interpretation of baiting the hook.
Thanks! It was suppose to be policewoman undercover but it didn’t show that enough.
The word limit!! it can be a longer story.
Didn’t see that one coming, nice twist!
Thank you! It was fun to write. 🙂
Very nice twisty take on the prompt!
Thank you. 🙂
Wow! Not the prompt that I saw. What a unique use of the opening sentence! Nicely done!
Thank you! I decided to have a little fun with it. 😀
Now that was creative! Enjoyed reading it.. 🙂
Thank you!
Loved your story! Sounds like a lovely challenge 🐥
Thank you Michelle! Do you like to write flash fiction? You are welcome to join. 🙂
Thanks so much, will give it a bash 🙂
Great twist, Joy.
Thanks Cat!
An excellent response ~ I have to admit I was sold on the prostitute angle until I read your comments ~ This works both ways ~ 🙂
Thanks! I wish I had elaborated on the police work so people would understand.
Well written. I really liked the interpretation of the bait. Great twist, too. 🙂
Thank you Millie! 🙂
Interesting take on the prompt. I see from the comments that the twist is not quite as I thought it to be, though I think it works well however you read it. 🙂
Thank you. I wish I had used a few more words though, to make it clear.
Clever!! Glad she got a bite so her pimp would not hurt her.
Actually, she is a policewoman undercover and Hank is her boss, not a pimp. I didn’t make myself clear enough. Thanks for reading and commenting!! 🙂
Really love your take on the story. Left me LOL. 🙂
I’m glad it made you laugh. I had in mind a policewoman under cover but I didn’t make that clear.
Nice figurative twist on the prompt. 🙂
Thank you.
What a different and creative way to use the prompt, Joy. Looks like she’s going to reel in a fish after all. That is if he isn’t an undercover policeman..Well done. 🙂 — Suzanne
Thank you Suzanne! (She is an undercover policeman is she is catching the fish to put in jail). LOL!!